We start our lives crying
always dying.
Living life to be a corpse
at the end of course.
Life is ever changing
rearranging.
Confusion reigns at every turn
we try to learn.
Greed has our planet dying
back to crying.
We need to start relearning
not stomach churning.
We need to sacrifice
not just once or twice.
Back to a life of sharing
ever caring.
Remembering your neighbor
providing favor.
Give to this world your love.
Peace soaring like a dove.
End the crying
and the dying.
I have never been one for rhyming poetry, but had this goofy rhythm going through my mind. Figured I would toss it how for reaction. That's what One Shot Wednesday at One Stop Poetry is for, I guess.
31 comments:
MM I like the message you convey to your readers. Can we fly this one high please!!!!
Thanks for posting this on One Shot Wednesday.
and thanks always for your encouragement
Moon smiles
All this is true, sad now we have to lose so much to realize...we may lose it all...hopefully we are not to late...nice read..Monkey Man...bkm
I like it, both the message and the rhythm. :)
-C
Well written poem in both rhyme and as a call to action for bettering our world and relationships.
nice poem..liked the idea..thanks for sharing at one stop..:)smiles.
Very well done, so true! =)
what a world that would be...think we should start a revolution MM! and that is what one shot is for...smiles. thanks for linking up!
I love the positve message you have given us..it is powerful and loved the line "End the crying
and the dying". A powerful message for which I thank you!! ~ Amanda x
I love the positve message you have given us..it is powerful and loved the line "End the crying
and the dying". A powerful message for which I thank you!! ~ Amanda x
(Sorry if this is a duplicate comment. This first one vanished on me.)
This is such a positive message. Would that we could live our lives with "peace soaring like a dove." That is so worth working for. Really nice One Shot, MM.
Rhyme on Brother...
It's YOUR poem!!!
Ya done good, Monkey!
And the sighing...
Aloha from Waikiki
Comfort Spiral
could be a rap song ya know! Good job with the rhyme. keep it up. i didn't like mine initially, thinking..."dang Hallmark card!" but the longer the poem, or the mix of soft/half rhyme, or mid-sentence rhyme loosens it some.
-quietly following,
Dianne
"End the crying
and the dying" - YES!
Sad poem, but so true.
"End the crying and the dying" ........hear, hear.
PG
An excellent emotional plea.
Beautifully shaped poem
A real roller coster
"We start our lives crying
always dying."
I really like the ending
"End the crying
and the dying."
Bring back rhymes I say. And a powerful theme here. I do poetry for fun rather than publication so for this week only, I’ve nervously posted an example from each of my blogs: an Elegy from Scribbles and Diversions, a Gogyohka from Random Twitter Stories, and free verse poem from Random Short Stories.
MM, this could be a rap song. I found myself sort of singing it in my head. I love the message!
Nice one, man. I agree with you: "End the crying and the dying". NOW! :)
It is good work with a strong purpose behind it. I also am not a fan of rhyming couplets but this one works well.
nice!
the rhyming appears to be your style, and it works!
smiles,
no more crying - would be perfect - you almost managed to convince me with your writing...smiles
...and yes - it would sound fantastic as a rap song!!
Poignant indeed!
A great message in there! And out forth with feeling too!
A beautiful read! A neat One Shot!
Wonderful poem, lovely that you shared it with us. came via one-stop :)
Wild Rose~
Great message in this poem...I love the first lines. The rhyming worked terrific.
A reminding piece of what life is suppose to be about. Your rhyme was okay. smhs
been away for a week..as you know..and catching up..this kind of reminds me of the 10 commandments..we seem to have forgotten so much..thanks for sharing with One Shot..cheers Pete
An interesting experiment might be to try and rewrite this free-verse without the rhymes and compare the two final products
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