The burning ember glowed a rich orange
as smoke swirled gracefully and seductively
from the perfect pout of her ruby red lips.
In low light the cloudy effluence was like a spot light.
Drawn as a moth to a flame,
he leaned toward her and said,
“There are laws about smoking in a public building.”
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33 comments:
Yeh guess it used to be sexy.
How sexy is cancer???
Thanks MM
nice 55
So not hot to me.
What amazes me is how many people still do it. The other day one of my dd's friends got in the car, and everything smelled of cigaret smoke. I know the girl doesn't smoke, so I'm betting it was coming from her clothes and her parents smoke.
Those are indeed some ruby red lips--about as seductive-looking with that nasty gunk coming out of them as a grapefruit, too. Nice 55, MM--and I for one applaud our over-arching intrusive government for making those laws and keepin that away from me. Loved your Tool meets the Cool Clerk story below, also.
Excellent. Unfortunately, as a Respiratory Therapist, those smokers keep me busy.
Marlboro Reds I bet.
Salems?
Anyway, nicely written KP.
Modern Noir!!
Loved your 55.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
i can hear the his of the flame sputteringout under that cold shower...smiles. nice 55 monkey
Nice, Monkey Man! I totally didn't see the ending coming.
Quitting was the best thing I ever did. Almost six years without a smoke! And now, when I see people smoking, I think "Wow, how did I ever think that was something good?!?", but I try not to be too judgmental because quitting was totally the hardest thing I ever did.
Fantastic. I'm usually not as polite as that man.
So much for being attractive! Great 55!
Teresa
Decadent and alluring, that was the way I always felt about my Marlboro Reds. Until my son looked me in the eye and said, "Huh. You stink" and I was done.
Lucky for us. I played, and kids seem to be my theme this week.
Dang...I keep on craving a smoke, you're not helping (smile). Excellent 55, I need that punch line ~
What a piece of artwork! Is it a photo? I can't tell. And here's another question for you: is a word missing from line four? You're always so sly, I think you've slipped something past me. Your wit has given me an insecurity complex!
smoking, uh, not....but that pic is cool.
To think I used to do that. Can't imagine why....
Nice reminder.
My 55 are here
and yesterday was my 5 month NICOTINE FREE anniversary.
Great 55
Women with lips like those often defy the rules. Cool 55!
That last line is a swift kick to the backside/dark side of that particular addiction- perfectly placed, perfectly timed.
You made smoking seem sexy. Some people are oblivious to rules...
Yea! & He should also say " happy No Tobbaco Day!" :D
All I can say is that I am glad my hubby quit. It hasn't been long but so far he is sticking to it..... fingers crossed.
lolssss
I wish the laws were enforced with as much sincerity here too!
You tell them (I am quite a rebel); they look back at you in amazement as if I danged them in a foreign lingo- I am talking about the educated class!
Wishing you a nice weekend.. xx
Sure looks seductive. I love the weave of your words as much as I am a fan of no smoking in public buildings (and to think I lost my head in Italy and participated in such a nasty habit...ah, but I looked good :-)
Nice MM.
Here's mine today:
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In Austin most public buildings would not touch her with a 15-foot pole, as per our smoking law.
xo
Great description and what an awesome picture to go with it.
Cheers,
Shanae
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Such beautiful lips - with such an ugly, dangerous habit. I am amazed when I see young people smoking... it is so NOT cool.
Yah it's sexy until you have to kiss them. Stinko man.
I dunno... Sharon Stone is still pretty damn hot in Basic Instinct. I think I might be able to overlook the smell...
A good one! I like it. I detest going somewhere and leaving smelling like cigarette smoke.
Ooh, this is good! I have not participated in any microfictions yet but tonight am dancing my way around those written by others. Very inspiring tour, most definitely. :)
I cannot stand cigarette smoke. If someone lights up, I leave the room.
I've always wanted to tell the wannabe sensuals that believe the smoke somehow adds to the mystique that exact same thing. Well done!
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