Thursday, June 2, 2011

55 - Smoking Seduction


The burning ember glowed a rich orange 
as smoke swirled gracefully and seductively 
from the perfect pout of her ruby red lips. 
 In low light the cloudy effluence was like a spot light. 
Drawn as a moth to a flame, 
he leaned toward her and said, 
“There are laws about smoking in a public building.”
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33 comments:

moondustwriter said...

Yeh guess it used to be sexy.
How sexy is cancer???

Thanks MM
nice 55

Unknown Mami said...

So not hot to me.

Alice Audrey said...

What amazes me is how many people still do it. The other day one of my dd's friends got in the car, and everything smelled of cigaret smoke. I know the girl doesn't smoke, so I'm betting it was coming from her clothes and her parents smoke.

hedgewitch said...

Those are indeed some ruby red lips--about as seductive-looking with that nasty gunk coming out of them as a grapefruit, too. Nice 55, MM--and I for one applaud our over-arching intrusive government for making those laws and keepin that away from me. Loved your Tool meets the Cool Clerk story below, also.

5thsister said...

Excellent. Unfortunately, as a Respiratory Therapist, those smokers keep me busy.

G-Man said...

Marlboro Reds I bet.
Salems?
Anyway, nicely written KP.
Modern Noir!!
Loved your 55.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

Brian Miller said...

i can hear the his of the flame sputteringout under that cold shower...smiles. nice 55 monkey

Mama Zen said...

Nice, Monkey Man! I totally didn't see the ending coming.

Me said...

Quitting was the best thing I ever did. Almost six years without a smoke! And now, when I see people smoking, I think "Wow, how did I ever think that was something good?!?", but I try not to be too judgmental because quitting was totally the hardest thing I ever did.

Autumnforest said...

Fantastic. I'm usually not as polite as that man.

edenhills said...

So much for being attractive! Great 55!

Teresa

Pheromone Girl said...

Decadent and alluring, that was the way I always felt about my Marlboro Reds. Until my son looked me in the eye and said, "Huh. You stink" and I was done.

Lucky for us. I played, and kids seem to be my theme this week.

yellowhousecafe said...

Dang...I keep on craving a smoke, you're not helping (smile). Excellent 55, I need that punch line ~

Enchanted Oak said...

What a piece of artwork! Is it a photo? I can't tell. And here's another question for you: is a word missing from line four? You're always so sly, I think you've slipped something past me. Your wit has given me an insecurity complex!

The Bipolar Diva said...

smoking, uh, not....but that pic is cool.

MorningAJ said...

To think I used to do that. Can't imagine why....

Nice reminder.


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A Daft Scots Lass said...

and yesterday was my 5 month NICOTINE FREE anniversary.

Great 55

Belinda Munoz said...

Women with lips like those often defy the rules. Cool 55!

Titanium said...

That last line is a swift kick to the backside/dark side of that particular addiction- perfectly placed, perfectly timed.

TALON said...

You made smoking seem sexy. Some people are oblivious to rules...

Mona said...

Yea! & He should also say " happy No Tobbaco Day!" :D

Adsila said...

All I can say is that I am glad my hubby quit. It hasn't been long but so far he is sticking to it..... fingers crossed.

Olivia said...

lolssss

I wish the laws were enforced with as much sincerity here too!
You tell them (I am quite a rebel); they look back at you in amazement as if I danged them in a foreign lingo- I am talking about the educated class!

Wishing you a nice weekend.. xx

Chef Kar said...

Sure looks seductive. I love the weave of your words as much as I am a fan of no smoking in public buildings (and to think I lost my head in Italy and participated in such a nasty habit...ah, but I looked good :-)

Nice MM.

Here's mine today:
Flash Friday 55 ~ You Brighten My Day

Jannie Funster said...

In Austin most public buildings would not touch her with a 15-foot pole, as per our smoking law.

xo

Shanae Branham said...

Great description and what an awesome picture to go with it.
Cheers,
Shanae
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Margaret said...

Such beautiful lips - with such an ugly, dangerous habit. I am amazed when I see young people smoking... it is so NOT cool.

Christine said...

Yah it's sexy until you have to kiss them. Stinko man.

Dr. Heckle said...

I dunno... Sharon Stone is still pretty damn hot in Basic Instinct. I think I might be able to overlook the smell...

Linda said...

A good one! I like it. I detest going somewhere and leaving smelling like cigarette smoke.

Lydia said...

Ooh, this is good! I have not participated in any microfictions yet but tonight am dancing my way around those written by others. Very inspiring tour, most definitely. :)

Matty said...

I cannot stand cigarette smoke. If someone lights up, I leave the room.

autumnraven said...

I've always wanted to tell the wannabe sensuals that believe the smoke somehow adds to the mystique that exact same thing. Well done!