Thursday, April 28, 2011

55 - Unnecessary Punishment

With all five children 
safely tucked in bed, 
he began working on his project. 
Splashing his home 
with the volatile liquid, 
he muttered to himself, 
“I’ll show her.” 
His hands trembled 
as his fevered, sick mind 
reached into the small box 
and ran the wooden stick on its side. 
Ssskkkriiitttchhh. 
WHOOSH! 
Only tomorrows headline remained. 
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35 comments:

moondustwriter said...

A volatile 55 MM

goodness - people actually resort to that stuff

Hope all is well with you

moonie smiles

dustus said...

Sick world. Makes you wonder, as does your 55. After clicking on the link I can't believe people do such things. Excellent 55, sad, well written.

rosaria said...

Oh my! You definitely caught the madness and the strangeness of people's fury.

5thsister said...

So disturbing. What makes a sick mind resort to this. Unfortunately it happens all to often. Well played Mr. Monkey

Mama Zen said...

Oh, hell. What a tragedy.

lime said...

oh, this is the most heartbreaking thing.

hedgewitch said...

I've never understood this thing for killing your whole family, which is in our news a lot--unlike this case, usually the person kills everyone else and then somehow doesn't have the guts to kill him or herself. this one is just appalling all round.

Matty said...

All too often.

Yes, I'll take out the entire family, all the innocent ones, just to teach someone a lesson.


Yep, makes sense to me.

Geesh

Brian Miller said...

well its a hot time in the old town tonight...yikes...

G-Man said...

Well, This was quite uplifting.
Thanks MM for this Depressionado!
Excellent 55 My Friend.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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Me said...

Sick, sick man.

I will NEVER understand what drives someone to such a thing.

Cloudia said...

chilling-

or should I say 'incendiary'?



steady, big monkey



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Josh Hoyt said...

So sad.

Pheromone Girl said...

Hmmm. Maybe the lesson here should be don't piss off the boy you married. Or try to leave. Or else, if you dare, take ALL the kids when you leave.

MomsJournal said...

Sounds like the kids weren't so safe in their beds. :(

Olivia said...

Ouchhhh!

I am a survivor of few of those plots!! I could feel the same pain again reading your words again.

Much beyond now..
Intense

Friday hugs xxx

Deborah said...

I had to click on the link ... Oh my!

the walking man said...

Nothing to say. Another motherfucker killing small kids to hurt a spouse. We are a sorry ass lot of humanity.

PBJdreamer said...

whoa

I can smell the kerosene

good job


that is all

PattiKen said...

Horrifying story. I can't imagine the emotion that could lead someone to such a terrible act. Good job capturing the moment, MM.

Titanium said...

Painfully sad, the backstory to these words. You definitely painted the picture with clean, sharp lines, MM.

Alice Audrey said...

The sad part is this could easily be in the newspaper tomorrow.

- Alice

Belinda Munoz said...

A tragically incendiary act captured in a well crafted 55.

Shanae Branham said...

Wow! He must have had a really bad night with the kids...

Click here for my 55

Lulda Casadaga said...

this is so close to home...not to long ago a father killed his wife in front of their 2 kids.
So sad...:(

Steve Isaak said...

Effective work.

Dr. Heckle said...

Wowza...

Women always say I have a sick mind when I reach for their box...

Helen said...

OK Mr. Monkey Man ... this was a tad terrifying. Well done as always. (oh-oh pardon that pun) I am in a wicked mood today!

Unknown Mami said...

That story just makes me angry. Why didn't he just kill himself?

KB said...

Oh no!

budh.aaah said...

Scary just so scary and almost..almost...hits too close home.

MorningAJ said...

That's very sad.

ladynimue said...

thats so damn sick !! pretty hard ! you did well to pen that ..

Steve E said...

HOLY SHIT!

(but a good write!)