Thursday, September 8, 2011

55 - Acrophobia

As the oxygen depleted altitude 
began to affect his thinking, 
his white knuckled fingers 
gripped even tighter 
and he allowed himself 
a firmer foothold, 
all the while repeating, 
“Don’t look down. 
Don’t look down.” 
At the same time, 
his partner murmured, 
“Stop with the drama already, will you. 
It’s only a six foot step ladder.”
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26 comments:

Heaven said...

I am scared of heights so I can relate.

Happy day !

Brian Miller said...

haha...sorry i probably should not laugh...put me on a 300 foot cliff and i feel it too...

Cloudia said...

Ha!



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Autumnforest said...

Man, that is so me! Even ladders feel like mountains.

G-Man said...

Drama Queen?
Scared E Cat?
Chicken Shit???
Lofty post KP...
I just happened to stop by on a whim, and low and behold...A 55?
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Pheromone Girl said...

Hey, wait - that's more like ME. Put a spider at the top of the latter, and I'm NOT going, no way, no how...

PattiKen said...

Ha. I used be afraid of heights until someone told me that a fear of heights is a fear of power. Presto! I was cured!

Margaret said...

I can always count on you for an awesome twist. Loved it!

Morning said...

I feel the sky high height in the first part of reading, smiled big after read the last line!

skillful short fiction, loved the read.

:)

exhilarating 55.

The Bipolar Diva said...

of all days, today I needed that laugh. Thanks MM.

A Daft Scots Lass said...

I thoroughly enjoyed the content and love the formation of it.

Cad said...

I sympathise! I can manage six foot, but get above 30 and I'm lost!

MorningAJ said...

I'm with him all the way....well, maybe the third step. :) Love it!

My 55 arehere.

Daydreamertoo said...

LOL It never looks as high when we're standing on the ground looking up as what it feels when we're up >>> there!
This made me chuckle, thank you :)

izzy said...

We do have days like that! thanks-

Doctor FTSE said...

Love the funny ones, MM! Thanks.

hedgewitch said...

I'm beginning to see a pattern here in these 55's. ;_) Thank goodness there is someone to save the narrator from himself.

Loved the graffiti story as well--finally, not just Americans do stupid and nasty things for ridiculous reasons, and then get caught at it. Refreshing tale with international flavor, MM.

Titanium said...

Fear of heights knows no boundaries :) loved the oxygen-depleted environment... amazing how hyperventilating will get you there, and fast.

Well done, MM!

Alice Audrey said...

LOL! Sounds like my dd and I while painting.

Olivia said...

lolsss
MM, that was some humor for my Saturday morning- rushing for work- uncalled for!

SULK

hugs xoxo

Kikit said...

Thanks for making me laugh with this! :)

hope said...

You made me smile with this one!

I still remember my Dad coming into my room while I was reading and asking 16 year old me, "Whatcha doing? I could use some help."

So up the ladder I went to paint the eaves of the house while my Dad, who I thought was invincible, stood firmly on the ground, afraid of heights.

Mama Zen said...

Good one!

Nara Malone said...

Ah, but it looks so much higher from up there. :)

Dr. Heckle said...

haha! Well, I pass out when I stand on my tip-toes... :P

Lydia said...

Hah! I am late in reading 55s, so am full of the intensity of having watched 9/11 programming today. As I began reading your 55 I was thinking in those terms. I really needed the ending in this 55! What a great way to start Sept. 12th (just past midnight here). Thanks!