Thursday, June 30, 2011

55 - Mystery, Man


A lone silhouette 
walked slowly up a fog-shrouded street. 
The upturned collar of his overcoat 
and low brim of his hat 
obscured his face 
from the light of passing cars. 
Stopping, 
he glanced up and down the street 
and said to no one in particular, 
“I wish I could remember where I parked my car.”
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27 comments:

Brian Miller said...

ha. i might have said that same thing this afternoon...really i think someone moves it just to play with me sometimes...nice 55 monkey...have a great holiday weekend....

hedgewitch said...

They ought to come with homing devices, I tell ya. Loved the sinister flavor of the lone confused soul searching the fog for his misplaced brain. Have a great 4th, MM

Christine said...

Funny, I usually instruct the children to make sure they know where the car is after a day of shopping in the mall I am hopeless.

Mama Zen said...

If that had been a woman, she would have been me!

Good one, Monkey Man. Made me snicker.

C.M. Jackson said...

where's Ilsa when you need her, Sam?

G-Man said...

MM..
We shall call this genre...
Numb-Nuts Noir!!
Loved your NNN 55.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Fourth of July

Stranger said...

If the vehicle has an alarm, set the chirp off -- but be smooth about it so no one knows that you're the dork setting off your own car alarm because you've forgotten where you parked.
No alarm? Yeah, I've been there too. That's when you act like you're taking the scenic walk and hope for a miracle view of your missing ride.

Cloudia said...

foreboding....FUN!




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Autumnforest said...

MM; I don't know if there's a name for finding anticipation and arousal in poetry, but you always have me holding my breath for that zinger at the end. Perhaps we could call it orgasmaprose.

MomsJournal said...

hahahaha! I guess putting him in a parking garage would have been too much of a giveaway, but they are my nemesis!

moondustwriter said...

Ha- love the foggy night scenario

Happy 4th MM

Alice Audrey said...

LOL! It helps to always park in the same part of the lot.

Jingle said...

Very thought provoking.
Happy 4th of July.

MorningAJ said...

Doesn't have to be foggy for me to lose my car. Fortunately the model I currently have has a "get you home" light, which I can switch on remotely. It's supposed to make it safe for me to walk to my door at night after I park up - but it's much more use for finding the car!

My 55 are here.

Belinda Munoz said...

You excel at this bait n' switch thing!

Me said...

Hilarious, especially because I can relate!

My kids are very used to wandering around in parking lots, trying to find our vehicle, they pretty much expect it actually. My new car (well, new 1 year ago) came with a panic button...beauty! When I can't find the car, I just push the button and the car lets me know where it is! :)

the walking man said...

Sounds like me except it was full daylight, and there was no overcoat or hat just a lost damn memory of where I put my damn car.

ScottF said...

hi MM lol I am that guy! fun!

Pheromone Girl said...

Nice ending there. I've never lost my car. Or my keys. Uh huh. Really. Except that one time....

Monkey Man said...

You'll never lose your car or your keys as long as you have that boy around to find your stuff. Good lad, he.

Unknown Mami said...

You made me audibly laugh. This could be an anthem for San Francisco.

Other Mary said...

Haha - that's the real mystery! I like the way you set this up. Thanks for reading and commenting on mine as well.

hope said...

Agh! That's such an awful feeling!

Here's wishing you a fun filled, no looking for the car 4th of July.

RNSANE said...

Oh, my gosh, how ofen that happens to me. I keep telling myself I cam going to write myself a not so I won't look like such an idiot walking around the parking garage, trying to act nonchalant.

yellowhousecafe said...

Ha! Creative as ever...as for him, didn't his car flash its lights if you hit the unlock button??? (smiles...not that I've EVER done that meself ~)

yellowhousecafe said...

Ha! Creative as ever...as for him, didn't his car flash its lights if you hit the unlock button??? (smiles...not that I've EVER done that meself ~)

Olivia said...

uh oh!!
Hope he could find it on time to go home or was it 911 again?

Everything should come with a remote.. :) where did I place the darn remote anyway?

lols xx