Thursday, February 24, 2011

Smoking Gun 55

The barrel was still hot 
long after the trigger had been pulled. 
Smoke hung in the air 
while the perpetrator 
casually walked around the room 
pondering how life had changed. 
Where there was once romance, 
there was now rejection. 
He missed the good old days 
when lighting a lady’s cigarette 
was considered a chivalrous deed.

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Anonymous said...

Whoa, Dude. Did he totally light her cigarette with a .45, or what?


This 55'll blow you clean away...

Anonymous said...

How fun! Times certainly have changed.

dustus said...

Was that a 55 or a .22? lol I'd like to think chivalry not dead, though it may seem like it's on life support sometimes. Great 55!

Autumnforest said...

I don't know how you did it, MM, but you managed to do a character study in a few short lines and made me smile too.

G-Man said...

I just LOVE .45 55's!!
Some people get just what they deserve.
I loved the feel of this.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

Me said...

Wow, nice one MM! Intriguing!

Mine is up, and features a gun as well...but the mood is quite different!

Brian Miller said...

smiles. i remember those gun lighters...nicely played monkey...

Alice Audrey said...

I remember those old cigarette lighters that look like guns. Now the smoke itself is considered evil.

Janna said...

Well done!
Nice twist. :)

The closest thing to chivalry I see these days is once in awhile a guy will hold a door open for me.
Kinda nice, I guess.
Still, I like to occasionally confuse them by getting to the door first and holding the door open for them instead.
After all, if we're going to have a world full of chaos, it might as well be polite chaos.

Thanks for another Friday 55!
Mine's here. :)

King of New York Hacks said...

Seems like 55 is now his speed limit...he should take it up a notch for the gal, good stuff monkey.

clean and crazy said...

he, he, he now they have an app for that!! there is a lighter app for the iphone that my honey has, you have to flick your phone for it to light up!

hedgewitch said...

The way smoking is frowned upon these days, I'm sure the lady should have been grateful it was firing her up and not a firearm. /sarcasm

Nice one, MM.

Enchanted Oak said...

I especially like the line about the perp casually walking around the room in contemplation. Another nebulously menacing piece of work, MM.
My 55 concerns a different sort of slow death:
Bacon-fat gravy

Steve E said...

Hey, this is GOOD, Mr Monkey Man! I like twisty 55's...thank you!

A Daft Scots Lass said...


joanny said...


fiery FF55 I hope he didn't singe her eyelashes.


Shadow said...

smoking was the chic thing to do (once upon a time). all the cool people did, anyway... now just the baddies smoke :(

anthonynorth said...

I remember those lighters :-)
Nice one.

the walking man said...

Different world dude...but now I do say "thank you" when they light mine.

izzy said...

Great ! love the sauntering after the fact - perspective seems to be popping up all over- Thanks.

MorningAJ said...

Clever! I like it.

hpicasso said...

"happiness, is a warm gun"
oh those tender post coital moments...seems he had a touch of PCT...yes, there is a malady for everything...HA

“From pleasure of the bed,/Dull as a worm,/His rod and its butting head/Limp as a worm,/His spirit that has fled/Blind as a worm.”
W.B. Yeats

Peace, hp

Adsila said...

Nice.... I still like a man to open my door.

Mama Zen said...

Well done, Monkey Man!

Linda said...

Times have changed, but I agree with Adsila, those gestures are nice.

Deb said...

I felt like I was in a scene from CSI. Awesome work!

TALON said...

I loved the mood you evoked - it played out like a movie.

Yes, times have definitely changed.

Awesome 55, Monkey Man!

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Gives a whole new meaning to the phrase "smoking gun" don't it?

Nice 55, Double-M!

RNSANE said...

He must have made a hell of a mess of her cigarette!

Mine is at:

Jannie Funster said...

Geez, remind me not to date that guy ever.

You are so funny and wry, Monkey Man!


Larry said...

MY Versoin:

The barrel was still hot, smoke hung in the air. He paced the room pondering how life had changed. Nobody was going to cheat on him and live to talk about it. Where there once was romance there was now rejection. He missed the good old days when they played together. But, by his book cheaters deserve death.

Kelley said...

You know I'm really slow. Was the gun a lighter? It was a gun-shaped lighter? Why are you trying to make me look stupid??

I know. It's not hard.

Mona said...

O Dear. It is no longer safe to love anymore!

Anonymous said...

From romance to rejection. I really love what you did with this, and how you tricked my mind! It's amazing how much things can change between two people and how lethal relationships can be. No one is dying from a gun shot today. The second hand smoke on the other hand ... ;)

evalinn said...

A gentleman criminal, huh? Nice one!

Anonymous said...

Oh maaaannn.. he really should have checked before using that "lighter"... and as it turns out, it was a pistol after all!!

A most interesting and chilling 55, MM!! WOWW!!!!

Marla said...

My uncle had one of those gun lighters when I was a kid. Almost made me want to smoke.