Tuesday, December 14, 2010

One Shot - Still Waters

Silhouetted by the dampened glare of street lights,
the beautifully curved form glanced skyward
trying to find romance in stars
lost to the impenetrable gray
of late night clouds.
Her long graceful fingers
slowly sliding over her slender waist
and round hips
as if imagining her hands
as those of a longed for lover.
Wetness dripped tears of rain
down the window before her,
matching the mascara tinted dew
falling from her lashes.
She hoped the rain
would wash away the gloom
and once again flood her heart
with the love of another.
She felt deserving
and knew desire.
But wanted a real
and tender love
tinged with passion
yet full of understanding.
It was there for her
if she had patience.
If she could wade through
the shallow puddles of a man
and find the depth of soul
to match the soul she carried within.
The silhouette slipped on her rain boots
and walked out into heaven’s tears
in search of puddles to splash
and deep waters from which to drink.
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40 comments:

Louise said...

Hello - this is lovely 'flood her heart with the love of another' - gorgeous! Not so 'monkeyman' methinks! :)

Claudia said...

wow - this is beautiful, passionate and full of well expressed emotions - gorgeous

Gabriela Abalo said...

Outstanding imaginary – full of emotions

Bravo!!

repressedsoul said...

Very sexy and emotionally written monkeyman. Really enjoyed the read.

Eric Alder said...

Not bad, MM!

(But mine was deeper: Still Waters Run Deep )

cianphelan said...

Now this was a touching one, here - romantic and passionate and full of heartwarmingly fine imagery. May the silhouette find and drink and know joy.

Michael said...

The last 2 lines were amazing.

Steve Isaak said...

Good thematic consistency (rain/emotion) and flow, strong work.

hedgewitch said...

Always the ones with the beautifully curved forms, I tell ya. Still, a nice, slow, processional piece with some excellent lines. Liked 'wading through the puddles of a man.." I think I may have done that a time or two. Enjoyed it.

Brian Miller said...

beautiful monkey...love the playfulness there at the end...splashing in puddles and drinking deep...

Unknown Mami said...

My favorite part: "If she could wade through
the shallow puddles of a man
and find the depth of soul
to match the soul she carried within."

The Bipolar Diva said...

Why do I think you know me?

Adsila said...

Beautiful!

G-Man said...

How do you come up with this stuff?
Not Bad at all Brother....

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PattiKen said...

Good stuff, MM. I especially like the last two lines. Those are two ambitions worth going out in thr rain for.

Autumnforest said...

Once again, MM, you seem to read my soul. I'd say more, but I have tears in my eyes.

Silver said...

I am carried away with the expresions you have used in here..it is filled with every bit of an extremes and yet, sensitive.

Thanks MM for sending me your warm thoughts..and sending you and Mrs M lot of loving wishes too. ;)

Silver

Deborah said...

This is just BEAUTIFUL ... it made me tingle all over, beautiful!

joanny said...

MM

Love this... loved the ending, passionate & playful reminded me of the lyrics by Bob Dylan " Just Like a Woman....

joanny

kavisionz said...

Oohh..those were some really well woven words in there! Richly vivid imagery, accompanied with a great choice of words, MM!!
"shallow puddles of a man" -- I really loved the visual formed by this line (without wanting to sound gender biased or anything of that sort)!!!

Great work, my friend!

DeLi said...

oh, the still waters really do run deep...

Aquarius63 said...

A beautifully expressed poem.

Anita.

Cor said...

Wow this was a beautiful poem. Well written and great flow. It struck a cord with me. A heartfelt thank you for sharing.

lukepraterswordsalad said...

Yes enjoyed this... but could have used a stanza-break or two for breathing-space. Solid write though, sure.

Best

Luke @ WordSalad

Desert Rose said...

Beautiful Monkey man..different from your style..awesome and elegantly sensual.last lines are haunting..:)

izzy said...

I especially enjoyed the end!
Thanks-

Marla said...

Absolutely beautiful....in tone, form and rhythm. Lovely.

JH said...

a mushy piece... a melancholy tone :)

Rachel Hoyt said...

I can completely relate to the emotions you express here... longing, love, hesitation, worry, fear.

Rhyme Me a Smile

gautami tripathy said...

That longing, the fear, and all. It touched me...

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Myrna R. said...

This is so tender. It touches the heart. Lovely.

Mona said...

wow! That is full of sensual imagery! I like this a lot!

budh.aaah said...

I just loved this one

Mama Zen said...

What a pretty write!

Kodjo Deynoo said...

I like the line, "she felt deserving and knew desire but wanted love" this is a nice poem friend

Tammy said...

Wow! Always a pleasure to visit your blog!

dustus said...

"If she could wade through / the shallow puddles of a man / and find the depth of soul" Here's hoping she can. Elegant lines throughout that stir emotions. Cheers

Tina said...

You're right. I do love this. Great images, you captured longing and searching so very well. Especially loved those last four lines.

Shashi said...

I enjoyed reading this one.. If she could wade through the shallow puddles of a man and find the depth of soul... what a lovely lines...


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