Thursday, September 16, 2010

A New Life Part IV - in 55


Days seemed like weeks.
Hours like days.
Minutes immeasurable.
The cold metal truck bed
had rattled her bones
so she thought she might never again
feel the steadiness of earth.
Yet she smiled
as she breathed in air
so sweet
it felt like heaven entering her lungs.
Eyes closed,
she willed the truck to stop.
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Here are Parts I, II, and III if you wish to play a little catch up.
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This is a Flash Fiction Friday 55.
If you want to know what the hell that means visit g-man.
The challenge is on.
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Or if you want yet another challenge write a Sunday 160.
Like a text message, the Sunday 160 only uses 160 characters (including spaces)
Keep on schedule - post Sunday
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Visit at least one other Sunday 160
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44 comments:

Brian Miller said...

she willed the truck to stop...nice. so now the real adventure begins eh? i am enjoying this series monkey...nice 55.

mine is up!

and i should be back on the 160 this week...

G-Man said...

MM....
Very interesting saga My Friend.
Excellent 55 chapter.
Thanks Brother You Rock!!!!
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End....G

Jannie Funster said...

This reminds me how little real problems I have in the world. She knew real hardship.

beautifully told. I am breathing fresh air with her too.

xo

Me said...

Definitely enjoying the ongoing story, MM. Hope there is more to come. :)
-C

Whitesnake said...

Monkey Magic!

Prayer Girl said...

You keep blogging this historical trip and I'll keep reading. :)

My 55 is up.

PG

KB said...

I'm loving this trip. Have a great weekend.

TALON said...

You pack so much vivid description in so few words...really neat. I feel like I'm in the truck being jostled around. Can't wait to see what happens next.

lime said...

the heart knows when it has found home.

PattiKen said...

I'm living this trip with her. This is such a great story, MM.

Janna said...

"Days seemed like weeks. Hours like days. Minutes immeasurable."

Hey, wow, that's exactly how I felt during my migraine on Wednesday. :0

Deja vu. :)

Thanks for another 55!
here's mine.

Someone Is Special said...

I loved this trip.. I hope the truck stop.. Do stop by Someone Is Special..

--Someone Is Special--

Autumnforest said...

Reminded me of riding on the bare metal seat of the 1950s McCormick tractor we had when I was a kid. Boing! Boing! Boing!

C.M. Jackson said...

I've been away and you've been busy Monkey Man--now I must travel back in time-While I do that you keep writing the story so when I get back I'll know why she stopped the car ...kudos--great work-c

Jinksy said...

That does look like a bit of a bone-shaker vehicle! :)

anthonynorth said...

Enjoyed the ride.

joanny said...

MM

An amazing journey -- love following this saga, as she travels to what will be a beautiful destination and destiny

Cheers,
Joanny

mrsnesbitt said...

Oh an amazing story unfolds yet more anticipated emotions - loving it!

Mine is up! Bring a coat!

Claudia said...

the cold metal truck bed - like this

Cheryl said...

The steadiness of the earth is overrated especially when the air tastes so sweet.

This series is something wonderful to behold.

MorningAJ said...

"it felt like heaven entering her lungs"
That's how I feel when I go to the coast. I can relate to that.

John's comments said...

The saga continues...Here's my Friday 55. Hope your week goes well

Mama Zen said...

I really like this. I can totally feel the bone rattling ride.

Alice Audrey said...

I feel her travel pains. Can't wait to see what she does once she gets there.

Cloudia said...

I could feel the travel fatigue and the cold metal.





Warm Aloha from Honolulu

Comfort Spiral

gospelwriter said...

love that your continuing the saga... and I know the bone-weariness of cross-country road travel

Thom said...

I'm so enjoying this tale my friend. I love the line that she willed the truck to stop. WOOT!!! I can't wait for next week already:) Have an excellent Friday :)

Sandra said...

Have been reading your posts, and am completely charmed by you and this blog :)

RNSANE said...

She's reached the Promised Land...such a wonderful story but it's not fiction!

Lulda Casadaga said...

Oh oh, I'll have to go back and read your other entries...great pic of pick up! ;)

Megan said...

Love your description of the truck - just gorgeous imagery.

Sandra said...

Yes, I'm back. Just read the comment you left on my blog, and I'm still laughing. Wanted to tell you that you would have written the post better than I did, "When I say Justin, you say sucks!" That's poetic!

Deb said...

Awesome as always, never a disappointment! :)
Enjoy your weekend!
:)

Nessa said...

This was a very nice installment to your story, adding nice atmosphere.

razzamadazzle said...

Nicely done. I always make sure to come and read then next part of your family history.

Teresa

Eaton Bennett said...

I want to breathe that kind of 'sweet air' too. I haven't caught up with the saga...just enjoyed the stand alone vibe of this. :)

the walking man said...

That is the same feeling I had when at sea except I never wanted the ship to stop.

hope said...

You're doing so well with this that no matter how HOT it is outside, I can feel the bone rattling chill from riding in the back of that truck!

Tina said...

Loved the part about breathing in heaven. As someone who spent a good part of this year struggling for a deep breath, this really spoke to me.

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Eric said...

ok, I'm hooked...will be back for the next installment...really like the lines:
"cold metal truck bed
rattled her bones"
Well done...

steveroni said...

I'm all caught up now, having read the first three.

Also I'm for SURE 'caught up' in following the future installments!

Scott said...

I was going to say that I cannot imagine such a journey. now i can imagine such a journey!

Marla said...

I feel like I can FEEL the journey she is on. Great job, MM.