Friday, February 26, 2010

On again off again 55

The lights flashed on and off.
Oddly at first,
then in an almost timed pattern.

On.

Off.

On.

Off.

It was mesmerizing to him.
Sending him into a trance like state.
Hypnotized to the point
of near hallucination,
he was finally brought back
when he heard her speak:

“Stop that blinking. You're making me crazy.”

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32 comments:

anthonynorth said...

Great last line. Enjoyed it.

the walking man said...

ha ha ha That is a great piece of writing there Bud!

Shadow said...

very clever ending, didn't see that coming...

Hootin' Anni said...

Excellent....[blink]too funny.....[blink] Very enjoyable.


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Brian Miller said...

smiles. i remember...what is you get stuck like that...or cant stop...you want to do that for the rest of your life..ok, already i'll stop...nice 55.

mine is up!

Susan said...

That was a great ending. I laughed. Great 55!
I’m up right HERE

Tabor said...

Clever clever clever. We all should be more like that.

Peter Stone said...

Well done Mr MM. You cracked me right up with that one.

My 55 is Love returned

Mona said...

LOL! that is so funny!

Sherry said...

You have a very unique way of looking at the world - I love it!

Chris said...

Love it; very funny! You're great with surprising last lines.

Alicia said...

This is one for teaching high school students about effective/memorable endings. :) Nice work.


Here's mine

VE said...

I need to do that when I play video games with my kids. I forget to blink...

Here's my 55 here

Alice Audrey said...

Blinking? LOL! The boy is tripping.

Nessa said...

Oh, this was hysterical. I loved it.

One Single Impression - Insomnia

Buzzard said...

You are a clever little monkey!

Mine's Up: The Loft

Titanium said...

That is terrific! I remember doing that when I was a kid... just passively blinking could send me right into a time warp.

Well done, MM. And the last two sentences... perfect.

Enchanted Oak said...

Fun fun fun, MM. You're always capable of that topsy-turvy final line. How long does it take to dream up these things?

Akannie said...

LOL...you got me!

No--I've NEVER done anything like that...I SWEAR!!!!!

Excellent 55, sir!

The Silver Fox said...

Aw, gee, the poor guy's just trying to have some harmless fun, and she has to spoil it!

sarah said...

too funny. ☺

C.M. Jackson said...

I read this to the Monkees theme-blinking in time to the music! Great 55!

Vodka Logic said...

Very smart.. didn't see it coming. Was thinking of someone driving a long straight road

g-man said...

I was expecting something MUCH more sinister...hahahahaha
Excellent 55 MM.
Thank You so much for being such a fine and faithful player!
Have a Kick Ass Week-End Brother!!

Cloudia said...

Monkeying around is FUN!



Aloha, Friend


Comfort Spiral

damselwithoutdistress said...

You're winking at me, right? That's why I say you're driving me crazy?

damselwithoutdistress said...

You're winking at me, right? That's why I say you're driving me crazy?

ShAKirA CHOONG said...

Indeed, it is very addictive. lol
You got us all blinking now.

Lovely 55.

hugs
shakira

Dianne said...

This was a first time, non-fiction laugh out loud for me.

You had me all curious and mesmerized in a sci-fi state of mind until you opened my eyes....Ha!
Still giggling.
still,
and yet still....

Thom said...

LOL...too funny. I love this my friend. Have a great weekend :)

hope said...

That was hysterical! I never know where you're taking us.

Cameron said...

i see the wifey might not have enjoyed the tranquilizing light blink ;)