Thursday, February 4, 2010

Candle Light 55



Light from the candles
flickered in the slight breeze
created as the stranger walked by.
The subtle change in light
wasn’t noticed.
On cat feet, he crept
ever nearer to the unsuspecting host.
Clenching and unclenching
the object in his hand,
he let his presence become known.

“Fuse wasn’t worth a damn. I changed it."


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32 comments:

Peter Stone said...

Sounded like a burglar until that great closer. I hate it when fuses blow...

My 55 is here

G-Man said...

In the 'Old' days, you would just put a penny in the fuse hole and twist the blown fuse back in!
Course there were many more House fires back then as well!
Excellent 55 My Friend
Thanks for your as always very entertaing contribution, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Brian Miller said...

lol. been there and maybe again if we get all the snow they are calling for this weekend...nice 55.

mine is up!

♥ Boomer ♥ said...

FABULOUS 55!!!!!!!! ♥♥♥

Thanks for stopping by mine! Afraid it wasn't fiction...

Alice Audrey said...

But then comes the scariest part - the bill.

Matty said...

Brilliant! It was the fuse after all.

Susan said...

My old apartment would blow fuses ll the time, LOL. Great 55

I'm up too :)

Chris said...

Loved the ambiguity in the first one and then that ending!

Felicitas said...

Very suspenseful 55 MM!

Dianne said...

Whew! I don't think I like that stranger.... or want to know more!
Mine is up HERE

Enchanted Oak said...

This just happened to us on a night when the temperature dropped to 23 degrees. No heat all night. Brrr. Blessedly, the hot water heater worked.

Tabor said...

I expected a twist but not that.

Realliveman said...

I love these twistie 55s. You think it's one thing and it turns out to be another.

Awesome 55!

Chef Kar said...

Phew ~ a happy ending! Love the twist and how you drew us in. Also love the photo. Thanks for stopping by my place earlier :-)

I'm up:

<a href="http://www.chefkar.blogspot.com>Friday Flash 55 ~ Checkmate</a>

Shadow said...

ha! you got me there. wheeeeeew.

the walking man said...

Better to switch that box to breakers. pay the stranger once and be done with it.

Ms Hen said...

Morning MM....love the twist about the fuse..

Betty Ann

Kathleen said...

Clenching, unclenching -- scary!!!
Nice work!
Here's mine:
http://inlindenhills.blogspot.com/2010/02/flash-fiction-friday-shouldering.html

Susan at Stony River said...

Oh boy, the tension right to the sudden smile it gave me at the end! LOL Very nice!

clean and crazy said...

oh, was he going to pop a fire cracker? was he going to scare someone and the fuse went out? great 55 i am still trying to figure out the whole picture... in the game of life, i am in the remedial program. great 55

Deb said...

You're making me think of the storm to come tonight...may have to change the fuse myself. Great stuff! :)

Have an incredible weekend!

otin said...

Always a little tricky there! Good stuff!

The Peach Tart said...

very nice

Green-Eyed Momster said...

I like candle light unless it's coming from a scented candle. True story!

Great 55.

Nessa said...

I was waiting for the whack in the head with the baseball bat. Very nice change up.

Flash 55 - Buried Secrets

Cameron said...

that could either be very creepy or very romantic piece :)

Mama Zen said...

Excellent! And, totally unexpected.

Prayer Girl said...

I just love 55s. I loved yours. A very creative 55 and terrific ending. Wonderful. Thanks.

PG

hope said...

I love that I never know where I'm going on this path with you and yet, I'm never disappointed. :)

Have a great weekend!

SandyCarlson said...

I love that changed fuse. I wonder if it was a short one.

RNSANE said...

I was, of course, imagining the worst! Terrific!

C.M. Jackson said...

moving through a really creepy basement to get to the fuse box----aggggh I will sit in the dark and wait for help or until I get hungry;-) then my fear of the dark will be overwhelmed by the super power of food..great post-c