Thursday, November 4, 2010

Flash Fiction 55 - Hidden

Adrenaline shot through his body
and he ran faster than he ever imagined possible.
When he thought he was safely away,
he hid himself.
His heart pounding like a heavy bass drum,
he thought its very sound
might allow him to be discovered.
He waited patiently for the cry of surrender:

“Ally Ally Oxen Free”.


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39 comments:

Alice Audrey said...

Aw. He better hide better than that. :)

Sweet.

Jannie Funster said...

I've always LOVED that phrase, but what does it mean exactly. Wondering the origin.

But hey, I can Google it.

Cute 55, Monkey Man!

xo

Brian Miller said...

hehe. funny how they hide like that....fun 55.

my 55

Katherine said...

Where can he be???? I wonder!!!
Love this light hearted post Monkey Man. It reminded me of a time when my eldest son who was 2 at the time was playing a game of hide n seek with his friends and he hid under the table... head first. Sure his head was hidden but his but and legs were all hanging out!! So cute!!

Someone Is Special said...

the pic is awesome to go with the words.. lovely 55.. Mine is here, Golden Days

--Someone Is Special--

G-Man said...

Played it MANY times...Late!
And we never were in any danger.
Loved your 55 MM...
Thanks for the walk down memory lane, and have a Kick Ass Week-End.

5thsister said...

Oh yes...my kids would play just like that and I would pretend not to see them as I went seeking! Great one Monkey Man!

sheila said...

Now that is awesome! How cute. I thought it was going another way, but this is great! lol.

Mine's up here
Have a great weekend!

lime said...

what a wonderfully whimsical 55. good memories!

Autumnforest said...

I think I played with him as a kid. What memories.

MIke Kilgore said...

Oh,double M, them was the daze!

razzamadazzle said...

So much suspense in this one. I'm glad it has a happy ending!

Teresa

moondustwriter said...

you led up to the finish in stealth - nice 55

great memories

Moon Smiles

A Daft Scots Lass said...

awesome!!

Belinda Munoz said...

Sweet! My son doesn't know how to hide yet, but I suppose he'll learn, like all grownups.

anthonynorth said...

I love the way they think: if they can see you, you can't see them.

anthonynorth said...

Or should that be the other way round?
A strange morning here :-)

Deborah said...

I love this .. the picture is just perfect! :o)

Nessa said...

I remember those days even though they were a very long time ago.

Tabor said...

Well, you put a very big smile on my face early this morning!

Jerry said...

I miss those days! Nice

TALON said...

This brought back some great memories. Thanks, Monkey Man!

Matty said...

I haven't heard that phrase in a long, long time. What memories.

Eric Alder said...

That kid's the worst hider ever! (LOL!)

Nifty 55, Monkey Man!

gospelwriter said...

I SEE him...

Great 55 - um, “Ally Ally Oxen Free”? :)

Silver said...

i can see spot him.. Aha!

Smiles,
Silver

Claudia said...

oh i love this one monkey man...playful and warm-hearted..and i love the pic as well

Lulda Casadaga said...

A fun filled memory 55! :)

MorningAJ said...

Tag! I can see you!

Mama Zen said...

Love it! And, the picture is perfect.

Everyday Goddess said...

What a great memory, thank!

Cloudia said...

Good one!



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Dianne said...

ohhh that's so cute! you and Brian should write a suspense together, like the infamous Brotin tales. Brotinky tales....
Ha
Di

kkrige said...

Great pic to go with your suspenseful tale MM! When my youngest plays hide and seek, she heads off to hide, then yells out that she is "here!" silly buggers, the lot of them.

Caty said...

this made me chuckle...Little kids at play. And I love that picture; it went so nicely with 55.

Kelley said...

I loved that! You summed so much about the excitement of outside play during childhood in just a few sentences.

Unknown Mami said...

That's a good shot of adrenaline.

Jingle Poetry said...

fabulous job.

Marla said...

Oh, brilliant! This swept me back to being a kid, running amuk in the neighborhood with all the other hooligans. How I miss those days.