Thursday, January 21, 2010

Can it hurt me?



After having heard strange noises,
seen and felt entities
that were not of this world,
Lana decided to put up obstacles
to keep them away.
She hung sheets and blankets
from the ceiling at odd angles
to create a maze.
This seemed to keep them at bay,
but why was she now coughing up blood?



This is a Flash Fiction Friday 55.

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26 comments:

Susan Anderson said...

How am I supposed to fall asleep tonight now? Scary! Sometimes are thoughts are the bad things we keep at bay and can become monsters if not kept at bay. Haunting imagery there. Great 55!
I'm up right HERE

G-Man said...

So much for the Maze eh?
Your kinda Dark lately MM?
Either way you sure can write up a storm Son!
Excellent 55 My Friend.
Thank You for playing today, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Marla said...

You are very good at scary!!

Ronda Laveen said...

Oh no! They got her.

Janna said...

Wow, freaky. And it matches the picture really well.
(!!!)

Thanks for doing Friday 55!
You can read mine right here.

Matty said...

Now this is a great 55, complete with suspense and leaving you wanting more.

Dianne said...

i agree, mm, this is dark.

I am not a cheeleader by any means.

but you can walk a sharp metaphoric line.

was this dedicated to someone, or just an inner angst? Duh, need I ask

mine is an "Early Poet" modified.
up HERE

the walking man said...

Tuberculosis?

anthonynorth said...

Very dark, but done with style.

Hootin' Anni said...

I gotta say this [sorry for the pun....not meant to be a pun] This is bloody good!!!!

My 55 is HERE, scroll below my show n tell stuff.

Happy Friday.

Brian Miller said...

oh nice 55. wonder what lurks inside the maze...or our hearts.

my 55 is up!

MIke Kilgore said...

A sheet maze? Who comes up with that....except MM! Well done, sir...

Shadow said...

oh how i love the dark and mysterious... goes perfectly with this day of cloud and rain and fog we're having today!

Nessa said...

Oh, that's spooky. Your 55 will give me nightmares tonight. Very well done.

Boy Meets Girl in 55

PhilipH said...

Jolly good stuff MM.

You've come up with the perfect last line, asking a question which begs an answer ...

Fandango said...

We thought she was crazy but the blood????
Well done.

Dr.John said...

Creepy story. Good 55

Nara said...

I had to read just one more before i wnet to bed. spooky.

Ms Hen said...

Dark .. but interesting. A lot said in only 55 words.. Excellent!!

I do think it would be cool to hang sheets and make a maze.. lol

Peter Stone said...

Wow, that's dark! Combining your text with that photo reminds me of night terrors, ugg, unpleasant things...
Thanks for visiting my 55 too.

Thom said...

Woah...the picture added enough darkness to an already dark story. Well written. Very good my friend :)

clean and crazy said...

very spooky!! great 55 thanks for stopping by!!

Green-Eyed Momster said...

Great 55, Monkey Man! I'm researching your comment. I'll let you know what I find out!

Take care!

Chef Kar said...

Ooo ~ I really love this one today MM. Intriguing, dark, mysterious and thought provoking ~ all in one.

hope said...

Well I did ask what happens next. :0

Spooky but engrossing non-the-less.

PS the Pratsie said...

spooky ! read such a well written scary post after long :)