Friday, December 4, 2009

Brrrrrr


The dark gray clouds
rolled ominously
over the forested hills,
completely enveloping them
in gloom.
The small sliver
of blue sky
that remained
hid and shivered in the cold.
Frost struck windows
and roofs
with its expanding
white crystals.
The last of fall’s leaves
curled tight
to keep themselves warm.
Winter arrived with a sneer.
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This is a Flash Fiction Friday 55.
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29 comments:

Chef Kar said...

A chilly 55 ~ and perfect as I sit wrapped in my coat and scarf ~ inside the house!

I'm up:

Friday Flash 55 ~ Sobering 55

Susan at Stony River said...

You made winter sound as uncaring and menacing as it feels. Yikes! This is fantastic.

Keep yourself warm Monkey Man!
:-)

Susan

Nessa said...

I like that. I feel chilly now. I need a fire.

Flash 55 - Love

anthonynorth said...

A chilly 55. Cold but I enjoyed it :-)

Brian Miller said...

nicely done. we are supposed to get snow on saturday! i hope so! great 55, winter is here!

mine is up!

staceyjwarner said...

I loved the image of the leaves curled tight against the cold.

Well done. It is cold in LA today too.

much love

Alice Audrey said...

That's winter all right. Very well put.

Tall Kay said...

What happened to Autumn? Is it winter already? We almost hit 80 today...winter is a foreign season down here! Thanks for sharing yours! Makes me want hot chocolate and a fire :o)

g-man said...

Yeah Winter......
Not my favorite time of year...
But it DID make for an Excellent 55 MM.
Thanks for this chilling tale.
Have a Kick Ass Week-End.
At least the Beavers will be somewhere warm.

lakeviewer said...

"winter arrived with a sneer." Precious. Great flash poem.

otin said...

Very cool! Literally!!

Bubbie said...

I loved your lines about the leaves curling up to keep warm. The whole poem inspired me to be more artistic in my writing. Really wonderful piece. And by the way, what you wrote about my 55 was SO CLEVER!! Your comment was better than my 55!

Prayer Girl said...

Living in South Florida I never see the scene you describe. I love your 55 because it reminds me of the winters of my youth.

PG

Inside our hands, outside our hearts said...

You are awesome at this K, I have missed so much in this time of chaos. But I am loving what I am seeing.

Well done my friend.

Soft love,
T

Green-Eyed Momster said...

Very good to see you posting again. I've missed your posts.
I'm freezing. 19 and 49? I need a warm place to spend the winters.

Kathleen said...

Wow! Loved that last line. Beautiful photo of hoarfrost, too. I assume you took it? Are those the little helicopter seed pods?

Janna said...

Winter has indeed "arrived with a sneer."
Good 55.... and very true. :)

Unknown Mami said...

Great writing, but is that a picture of a snow mustache?

Larry said...

Nice post I like the poem Thanks For stopping bye and leaving your comment. I'll see you Sunday.

Marla said...

You make this look so easy when I know darn well it's not. Lovely, simply lovely!

Dianne said...

You are such a poet, not a monkey man at all!
Thanks for YOUR comment!

Thom said...

Very chilling 55 my friend. I love it. :) Have a great weekend :)

Shadow said...

excellent! if can feel the chill!

swapnap said...

The feel of frost was felt powerfully in these words. Good one.

Felicitas said...

Beautifully done! That's exactly how I envision winter's arrival... slowly enveloping us with its frosty touch and not caring in the least how we are affected by it. (Yes, living in Canada has made me a little bitter towards it.) Wonderful 55!

enchantedoak said...

As we say around here in our false German accent: Vunderbar! Glad I got a heater in the sunroom office tonight.

enchantedoak said...

P.S. My Sunday 160 is up as of midnight tonight.

the walking man said...

The leaves should in the next few thousand years evolve into a migratory pattern.

MIke Kilgore said...

Really great imagery! Nicely done in 55 words