tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post8193408799224187079..comments2023-11-05T02:39:09.527-08:00Comments on Monkey Man: One Shot - Tick ClackMonkey Manhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06741294113777908130noreply@blogger.comBlogger36125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-68928292798114090962010-09-27T22:13:54.899-07:002010-09-27T22:13:54.899-07:00Sometimes the mind won't listen.
Love this.Sometimes the mind won't listen.<br /><br /><br />Love this.Marlahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18000815937078399278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-57838146045601025532010-09-23T07:24:19.104-07:002010-09-23T07:24:19.104-07:00You are right, MM. The muse of the rails called to...You are right, MM. The muse of the rails called to us both this week. This is a beautiful poem she left behind with you as she passed through your sleepless night.PattiKenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02894925987580502697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-82331172800896345052010-09-22T20:06:09.889-07:002010-09-22T20:06:09.889-07:00I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, Monkey Man. I ...I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, Monkey Man. I related to it on every level. Writing to expel the demons, the human condition, knowing I can't control others - only my attitude and actions, insomnia...thank you for sharing it!Sheilahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06541409754494611831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-44388501389392813692010-09-22T16:01:49.115-07:002010-09-22T16:01:49.115-07:00Love the motion of the train. Excellent OS.Love the motion of the train. Excellent OS.KBhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02621937316200868307noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-38653193029986170552010-09-22T15:30:33.668-07:002010-09-22T15:30:33.668-07:00I like the sound and motion you have created throu...I like the sound and motion you have created throughout your poem. The train and movement of time is much like the constant progression of thoughts....destination unknown. Like the parallelisms.<br /><br />Awesome One Shot.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-65675710579171918062010-09-22T15:18:50.793-07:002010-09-22T15:18:50.793-07:00many of my nights are like this .. you wrote it to...many of my nights are like this .. you wrote it too well :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-80950935602985359372010-09-22T13:53:15.771-07:002010-09-22T13:53:15.771-07:00hi monkey...i just read bri's comment and i co...hi monkey...i just read bri's comment and i couldnt agree more..probably also one of the best pieces i have ever read by you too...and i dont say that in anyway to belittle your other tremendous work..this was just that good...great share for one shot...cheers peteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-85365469198978231212010-09-22T13:22:03.078-07:002010-09-22T13:22:03.078-07:00There are times in the spring and fall when we can...There are times in the spring and fall when we can hear the trains going by at night -- the tracks are about a mile and a half away. And they sound just like this. Nice one.Glynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10802111972232088511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-20308738865249673572010-09-22T12:52:10.043-07:002010-09-22T12:52:10.043-07:00Write to right the mind
focus to make it listen
to...Write to right the mind<br />focus to make it listen<br />to the train's trailing sounds<br />in the lull between<br />the hands' movement<br />into time finding silence<br /><br />Thanks for stopping by Writing Without Paper.Maureenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13290283101378474845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-72417728768092594012010-09-22T12:32:33.291-07:002010-09-22T12:32:33.291-07:00Acustic pollution... what we have to live with unl...Acustic pollution... what we have to live with unless we leave it all and set in the countryside.... then , maybe the chirping of so many birds...<br />But of course that would not be the same. That sound I love, the rails. Maybe cause We have no trains in here...<br />Great shot... I love those thoughts of yours<br />;)Dulçe ♥https://www.blogger.com/profile/14958592985938279356noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-16507407068331329342010-09-22T10:33:15.126-07:002010-09-22T10:33:15.126-07:00Having to do long distance on trains. I wish you c...Having to do long distance on trains. I wish you could sleep but announcement after announcements soon stops that but I love the descriptions. Thanks for reading and commenting on my <a href="http://meawriter.wordpress.com/2010/09/21/in-the-community-shall-you-find-me/" rel="nofollow">poem</a>. Hope your week goes well.John (@bookdreamer)https://www.blogger.com/profile/11576434749272275190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-85827624494329729712010-09-22T07:32:00.723-07:002010-09-22T07:32:00.723-07:00The train kept a rollin, ALL night long...The train kept a rollin, ALL night long...G-Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14968807697181554781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-84320811512299510992010-09-22T06:33:13.262-07:002010-09-22T06:33:13.262-07:00i can almost feel the train's motion and have ...i can almost feel the train's motion and have the sound in my ear - i love to fall asleep in trains (and cars..only when not driving myself) it has somehow a comforting feeling - great poem!Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-85076507584282211492010-09-22T06:26:11.573-07:002010-09-22T06:26:11.573-07:00MM
Oh those sleepless nights, if only... we could...MM<br /><br />Oh those sleepless nights, if only... we could turn off the one sided chatter as easy as the passing train, Love the use of the train in the back ground of your thoughts passing through. <br /><br />Cheers,<br />Joannyjoannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03338150531816845279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-8480159772852449452010-09-22T06:03:00.050-07:002010-09-22T06:03:00.050-07:00musical rhythms and lovely sentiments.
skillfully ...musical rhythms and lovely sentiments.<br />skillfully done!Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01546696605935159862noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-32502793848991175482010-09-22T05:12:05.379-07:002010-09-22T05:12:05.379-07:00"to relieve you of the chatter..." beaut..."to relieve you of the chatter..." beautiful. Nice write here. Love and Light, SenderAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-19284330473664062572010-09-22T03:17:00.358-07:002010-09-22T03:17:00.358-07:00This one is a beauty.... loved your words, " ...This one is a beauty.... loved your words, " WRITE - In hopes extracting the demons of the mind..." <br />Your write wonderfully at ease with yourself and your thoughts....<br /><br />ॐ नमः शिवाय<br />Om Namah Shivaya<br /><br />Connect with me at Twitter to get one verse everyday of love, longing and life... @VerseEveryDayShashidhar Sharmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10752054354309206121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-4165091288639205002010-09-21T21:45:30.824-07:002010-09-21T21:45:30.824-07:00Looking for sleep, for quiet, for peace of mind, a...Looking for sleep, for quiet, for peace of mind, a human condition that never changes.Rosaria Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03133147851332084180noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-42796906208666056902010-09-21T21:21:34.181-07:002010-09-21T21:21:34.181-07:00You are incredibly witty. A terrific writer. And a...You are incredibly witty. A terrific writer. And a talented poet. Yup. I've got inferiority issues.<br />However, I do have one suggestion for your insomnia: sleeping pills.Sandrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09894333322881236627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-1621426500193976952010-09-21T20:23:38.989-07:002010-09-21T20:23:38.989-07:00I always like a train's rhythm - hypnotic... I...I always like a train's rhythm - hypnotic... I like the mind "Wanting to carry a one sided conversation<br />that no one hears" and the idea of writing to hear quiet. Great and thought-provoking one shot!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-44823102711673825932010-09-21T20:18:29.805-07:002010-09-21T20:18:29.805-07:00oh very nice..the sound of the train...but the ina...oh very nice..the sound of the train...but the inablity to sleep is what I read here...words in your head --a one side conversation...write it, maybe you can then sleep...to the rhythm of the night...bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-74466778583749924972010-09-21T19:44:58.589-07:002010-09-21T19:44:58.589-07:00I love the rhythm of this poem and so many nights ...I love the rhythm of this poem and so many nights my brain sounds like a train and sleep eludes me...I cherish the rare nights of dreamless sleep I sometimes get-or the nights I don't remember my dreams :)Catyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13203872150946002183noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-27486594901955018692010-09-21T19:18:35.384-07:002010-09-21T19:18:35.384-07:00Throughout this work the rhythm stays constant cre...Throughout this work the rhythm stays constant creating that music, driving,those sounds like a racing heart when the mind won't stop and takes you down parallel lines. This was very successful and effective. It struck something universal in me. Good work. Thanks, Gay (@beachanny)Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-29680171760624806422010-09-21T19:16:28.882-07:002010-09-21T19:16:28.882-07:00The infusion of the sound is striking as is the co...The infusion of the sound is striking as is the coming to terms with restlessness. Wonderful poem with great depth. cheersdustushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07796500077556153584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8189125011913017491.post-90056793503751890282010-09-21T18:45:07.257-07:002010-09-21T18:45:07.257-07:00The workings of mind compared with a train journey...The workings of mind compared with a train journey. I liked it very much..<br /><br /><a href="http://firmlyrooted.blogspot.com/2010/09/ode-to-un-puntuated-verses.html" rel="nofollow">ode to un-punctuated verses</a>gautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.com